Level 5 exemplars and comments. Paper 1 Sample 1: Section A, Question 1

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1 Level 5 exemplars and comments Paper 1 Sample 1: Section A, Question 1 1

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7 Sample 1: Section A, Question 1 Comments (i) Although no real similarities are drawn between characters thoughts, credit is given to the way in which this response develops fluently and well beyond a full coverage of what each is thinking about. Clearly points out how Ralph thinks not just about what to say at the Assembly, but also the best way to deliver his speech in order to have the most impact. The aspect of self-awareness is identified as a gradual decline not only in terms of clothing and behaviour, but also language. Despite the discussion of Iago starting weakly with irrelevant mention of the dialogue, the response here quickly redeems itself by developing into a good character analysis of Iago (e.g. noting his intense jealousy), Cassio (e.g. flirtatious manner ) and Othello (e.g. using Othello s good qualities and twisting them into weakness ). Shows a full understanding of Iago s scheme, what motivated him and how he plans to carry it out (ii) A largely relevant and logical response here. (iii) Maintains clear contrast throughout answer with effective support. Answer extends further into thematic significance. 7

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14 Section A, Question 1 Comments (i) Despite occasional difficulties in phrasing, a well-supported and well-balanced answer which introduces an aspect of comparison from the outset. In addition to explaining the details of Ralph s thoughts, this answer also points out Ralph s moment of self-awareness about maturity, and supports this well. The candidate also notes how he derives inspiration from external surroundings. The discussion about Iago is correctly confined to the contents of his soliloquy and mentions not only what Iago is plotting, but also how he plans to achieve this. The answer further expands impressively into a character analysis of Cassio and Othello. (ii) Shows a perceptive understanding of Golding s use of symbolism. (iii) Identifies differences in the way characters are thinking. Discussion touches on the philosophical nature of Ralph s thoughts, as well as the significant fact that he is a child compared to the adult Iago. 14

15 Sample 3: Section C, Question 5 15

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17 Sample 3: Section C, Question 5 Comments (i) The candidate easily picks up on the gothic nuances. All the key points of the story are interpreted correctly and summarized effectively to demonstrate a full understanding. (ii) & (iii) Demonstrates a sound understanding of how and why a variety of literary techniques are employed. 17

18 Paper 2 Sample 1: Part I Section C, Question 5 18

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24 Sample 1: Part I Section C, Question 5 Comments This is a well-constructed response, with a strong introduction mapping out the central argument, followed by logical, concise analysis and a clear conclusion. The candidate s points are well supported by saliently chosen episodes from the film, and the comparison between the characters of Walter and Colonel Yu is deftly handled throughout the essay. Moreover, the observation that the characters ideas of masculinity may have negative effects (e.g. Walter s wounded pride as a husband leading him to bring Kitty to Mei-Tan-Fu) demonstrates a critical, higher-level understanding of the text. 24

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31 Part I, Section C, Question 6 Comments The candidate demonstrates considerable knowledge of the film through this detailed analysis of Mr Waddington and Mother Superior. What is particularly impressive is her ability to analyze the importance of these characters from a variety of angles from the point of view of plot (e.g. Mr Waddington telling Kitty about Charlie Townsend; Mother Superior showing Kitty the convent and the orphanage), characterization (Mr Waddington s nobility and Mother Superior s religious presence) and the way they contrast with Walter and Kitty. Overall, this is an insightful and engaging response. 31

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38 Sample 1: Short Task: Creative Writing Comments This is an engaging short story which shows the candidate s confident understanding of the genre of the short story. The story demonstrates careful build-up of the characters and the plot, leading to the climax and the ending. The appropriate use of realistic and everyday language and dialogue help to establish the background of the characters and to create tension and conflicts. The use of the first person narrative is also effective in displaying the different emotions of the narrator. The story is a delight to read. 38

39 Extended Essay: Setting One Apart Isolation through setting in Frankenstein; the Modern Prometheus and Edward Scissorhands 39

40 Extended Essay: Setting One Apart Isolation through setting in Frankenstein; the Modern Prometheus and Edward Scissorhands 40

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49 Extended Essay: Setting One Apart Isolation through setting in Frankenstein; the Modern Prometheus and Edward Scissorhands Comments This essay follows the topic closely and has a neat structure. The scope of the discussion covers different aspects of isolation: physical, social and emotional. The candidate displays a good understanding of the setting, and discusses physical landscape, location, weather, etc. The argument is well-substantiated with pertinent examples of visual elements like lighting, colour and costumes. It also adopts an analytical style with a balance of textual information and interpretation. 49