Commentary on Candidate Evidence. English (National 5): Reading for Understanding, Analysis and Evaluation

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1 Commentary on Candidate Evidence English (National 5): Reading for Understanding, Analysis and Evaluation SQA 1 of 36

2 Commentary on Candidate evidence Candidate 5 The evidence for this candidate has achieved the following marks for each question of this course assessment component. The candidate was awarded 17 marks. Question 1 The candidate was awarded 2 marks. The reference to game after game was awarded 1 mark, and the accompanying comment continuously played (from the end of the candidate s answer) was also given 1 mark. Question 2 The candidate was awarded 3 marks. Bullet point one was given 1 mark for the idea of perseverance. The candidate s second bullet point is unfortunately a repeat of the first point made, and was given 0 marks. Point three he wanted to play for the team so badly is a gloss of yearned and covers the idea of Mark being keen to play for the team - this was given 1 mark. In bullet point four, the candidate s word, pride shows understanding of the moment of glory and, as the intensifier was already addressed in a previous bullet point, the candidate was awarded 1 mark here. Question 3 The candidate was awarded 5 marks. Bullet point one contains the idea of very few succeed and was given 1 mark. Bullet point two, many stages of filtering, is a gloss of the sifting process begins and was given 1 mark. Points three to five collectively convey the idea of a small number making it all the way to the top flight. 1 mark was awarded here. Point six gained 0 marks. SQA 2 of 36

3 Bullet point seven is a gloss of Many struggle to cope with rejection, and was given 1 mark. Point eight glosses the idea of depression, and was also given 1 mark. Question 4 The candidate was awarded 1 mark. The mark was given for the idea of multiplicity in there are so many footballers that have been turned away, but no mark can be awarded for the comment about sand as the candidate s meaning is not clear. Subsequent comments are confused and gain no marks. Question 5 The candidate was awarded 1 mark. Without losers, etc is a correct selection under sentence structure, and was awarded 1 mark for the reference. No further mark was awarded for the accompanying comment. The candidate has then offered another feature of sentence structure and cannot therefore gain further marks as the question required analysis of two different language features. Question 6 The candidate was awarded 2 marks. The comment see through is a literal translation of transparent and shows no understanding of meaning in this context. No marks were rewarded for rewards are real as the mark here was for the idea of chances rather than rewards being widely available. The final bullet point, however, offers a condensed answer and scores 2 marks for the ideas that the most talented players succeed and that background is irrelevant. Question 7 The candidate was awarded 3 marks. In bullet point one, no marks were awarded for put through school as this is not the same idea as who have done well at school. In any case, candidates need glosses of both educated and self-assured. At the end of the bullet point, 1 mark was awarded for higher probability of being greater at football. Point two is the idea of long ago, and was given 1 mark. No marks were awarded for bullet points three or four. Point four is another attempt to address the first bullet on the marking instructions, but the candidate simply lifts from the passage. SQA 3 of 36

4 Point five glosses losing is essential and was awarded 1 mark. Point 6 is too reliant on lifts and was given 0 marks. Question 8 The candidate was awarded 0 marks. The candidate offers no identification of feature of sentence structure and thus there is no appropriate comment. 0 marks awarded. Question 9 The candidate was awarded 0 marks. No selection is made from lines 60 64, and therefore no relevant explanation. 0 marks awarded. SQA 4 of 36

5 Candidate 6 The evidence for this candidate has achieved the following marks for each question of this course assessment component. The candidate was awarded 23 marks. Question 1 The candidate was awarded 2 marks. 1 mark was given for the reference absorbing, and 1 mark was given for the comment on constant imersion. Question 2 The candidate was awarded 2 marks. In bullet point one, 1 mark was given for the idea of never been picked ( wasn t good enough to join ). In the second bullet point, the idea of perseverance clearly comes across 1 mark. In point three there is nothing on the intensity of Mark s desire, and nothing on getting in the team 0 marks. In the final bullet point there is no understanding of the moment of glory 0 marks. Question 3 The candidate was awarded 6 marks. In bullet point one, they are constantly stressed, is sufficient for the idea of anxiety 1 mark. In the second point, can t take not being selected is acceptable for the idea of struggling to cope with rejection 1 mark. become more shy in failure clearly suggests understanding of loss of confidence 1 mark. can become severely mentally broken contains the idea of depression 1 mark. In the fifth bullet point, the idea of the scouts causing nerves/pressure is suggested by they fear/respect the scouts - 1 mark. The candidate s final bullet point demonstrates a clear understanding of the idea that selection starts early 1 mark. SQA 5 of 36

6 Question 4 The candidate was awarded 1 mark. 0 marks were awarded for miniscule. However, 1 mark was awarded for players part of a huge body. No further mark was awarded because the candidate does not go on to develop the point about the chance of being selected. Question 5 The candidate was awarded 4 marks. 1 mark was given for the appropriate reference ( natural selection ), and 1 mark for a good analytical comment. 1 mark was awarded for the identification of a feature of sentence structure ( short sentence structure ), again 1 mark for the accompanying analytical comment. Question 6 The candidate was awarded 1 mark. The only correct material here is contained in bullet point two, which clearly shows an understanding of The best of the best shine through 1 mark. Question 7 The candidate was awarded 3 marks. In the first bullet point, the candidate demonstrates understanding of mind and body grow together with the statement that our physicallity and intelligence are connected and develop together 1 mark. The second bullet point shows understanding of the idea that losing is necessary/natural 1 mark. Point three relies too heavily on lifts from the passage 0 marks. In bullet point four, the candidate comes close to the idea that we react to failure is crucial, but there is not enough to gain a mark 0 marks. Point five is a sufficient gloss of It is natural to be sad 1 mark. Question 8 The candidate was awarded 2 marks. 1 mark for a correct identification of the feature of repetition. 1 mark for the relevant analytical comment. SQA 6 of 36

7 Question 9 The candidate was awarded 2 marks. 1 mark was given for a relevant selection. 1 mark was awarded for the comment which links the selection with specific reference to a main idea of the passage. SQA 7 of 36

8 Candidate 7 The evidence for this candidate has achieved the following marks for each question of this course assessment component. The candidate was awarded 27 marks. Question 1 The candidate was awarded 2 marks. 1 mark for a correct reference. 1 mark for a good analysis of deterred. Question 2 The candidate was awarded 3 marks. In bullet point one, didn t get selected is an acceptable gloss of never made it onto, and was therefore given 1 mark. (There is no requirement for candidates to gloss the word team. ) In the second bullet point, trialed is too close to kept going to the trials; therefore 0 marks. In bullet point three, 1 mark was awarded for so badly become better. Note that the candidate deals with the intensity implied by yearned here. In point four, there is enough in privileged to show that the candidate understands the idea that Mark wanted his moment of glory - 1 mark. Question 3 The candidate was awarded 5 marks. In bullet point one, Only 2% shows understanding of the small number involved, and was given 1 mark. In the second bullet point, rejection is a lift, but 1 mark was awarded for the idea of mental health damaged. In the third bullet there are too many lifts, and 0 marks were given. In bullet point four, 1 mark was given for quality is very good, which is a sufficient gloss of the standard was high. In the candidate s fifth bullet point, 1 mark was awarded for the understanding shown of the nerve racking visit of the scouts. In point six, 1 mark was given for stage to stage gets smaller and smaller as it indicates understanding of only a handful were picked. SQA 8 of 36

9 Question 4 The candidate was awarded 2 marks. Multiplicity of the grains of sand 1 mark. Multiplicity of players 1 mark. Question 5 The candidate was awarded 4 marks. For sentence structure, 1 mark was awarded for the reference without losers evolution. The candidate then refers to a list, which is incorrect. However, the candidate goes on to correctly observe that the writer shows the need for the negatives to allow for the positives. This comment was given 1 mark. For word choice, 1 mark was awarded for reference to inevitable, and 1 mark was awarded for the correct analytical comment on the suggestion that failure is a certainty. Question 6 The candidate was awarded 3 marks. In point one the candidate does not express a clear idea 0 marks. Point two is a condensed answer truly talented was given 1 mark for the idea that most talented individuals do make it; despite a hard background was given 1 mark for the notion of irrelevance of background. In the candidate s third point there were no marks for no shortcuts, but 1 mark was gained for no help that will get you straight to your goal, as it addresses the idea of a lack of nepotism. Question 7 The candidate was awarded 4 marks. In point one the candidate has correctly glossed self-assured as self confidence, has the qualitative comment of good education 1 mark. But better at football is too close to the original text and therefore cannot gain a second mark (for perform more effectively. ) In point two, there is too much reliance on lifted material 0 marks. The candidate s third point failing is natural, is an acceptable gloss of losing is an essential part of life and was given 1 mark. Point four seems to be close to pathway from the passage, but there is enough in the comment about failure allowing us to start a new dream to be awarded 1 mark. SQA 9 of 36

10 In point five the comment it is normal to be unhappy is a gloss of It is natural to be sad, and was awarded 1 mark. Question 8 The candidate was awarded 2 marks. A correct reference was made: a new dream, a new hope, a new way of finding meaning. 1 mark was awarded here. The candidate identifies this as a list, which was incorrect, but goes on to make an acceptable analytical point: to emphasise that failure is not the end. 1 mark was given for this comment. Question 9 The candidate was awarded 2 marks. The candidate made a correct selection: Life is too short, too precious to be derailed by failure. We have to accept it. 1 mark. The candidate states that there is a summarising function here, and goes on to make a connection with a specific main idea of the passage, that we should welcome failure as it can be beneficial. 1 mark was awarded for this comment. SQA 10 of 36

11 Candidate 8 The evidence for this candidate has achieved the following marks for each question of this course assessment component. The candidate was awarded 22 marks. Question 1 The candidate was awarded 2 marks. An appropriate reference game after game was given 1 mark. The supporting comment play and play all day was also given 1 mark. Question 2 The candidate was awarded 4 marks. The candidate s use of own words is initially quite weak but 1 mark was awarded for never got into the team as there was not a requirement here to gloss team 1 mark was given for never gave up as it addresses the idea of perseverance. 1 mark was awarded for wanted to play so much get better at football which is a gloss of yearned to progress. 1 mark was given for ability sadly lacked what the teams were looking for, which is a gloss of he was just off the pace. Question 3 The candidate was awarded 3 marks. The first bullet point is an acceptable gloss of struggle to cope with rejection, and was awarded 1 mark. The candidate s second bullet point relies too heavily on lifts and was awarded 0 marks. ( serious things is an insufficient attempt to address mental health issues.) In the third bullet point He was totally devestated glosses I was crushed with disappointment, and was given 1 mark. In the same bullet point, an acceptable gloss is also given of had only just started 1 mark awarded here. No marks were awarded for the remainder of the points as too much is lifted from the source text. Question 4 The candidate was awarded 2 marks. SQA 11 of 36

12 The just as so (in reverse) construction has been used effectively by the candidate. Reference is made first to the fact that for everyone 1 Premier league player we watch there has been loads of people who have failed (1 mark). The candidate then goes on to deal with like grains of sand on the beach, adding the acceptable comment that there is so much and many of it (1 mark). Question 5 The candidate was awarded 3 marks. For imagery, the candidate makes reference to a race. 1 mark was awarded for reference here. The candidate s supporting comment came earlier in the response ( He shows the stages of trialling on football ) 1 mark. The candidate then goes on to deal with sentence structure. Reference is made to the short sentence But this is failure. 1 mark was awarded for identification, but there was insufficient analysis to award anything further. Question 6 The candidate was awarded 2 marks. The first bullet was awarded 2 marks as two aspects of the answer are successfully dealt with: irrelevance of background 1 mark; Their talent will stand out. 1 mark. Question 7 The candidate was awarded 5 marks. The candidate s first bullet point was given 0 marks because of a reliance on lifts from the text. In the second bullet point, 1 mark was awarded for Failing is tottally devastating, which is a gloss of failing is crushing. 1 mark was also awarded for it s normal to feel this way, as it is an acceptable gloss of It is natural to be sad. Bullet point three contains a sufficient gloss of failure how we respond to it, and was given 1 mark. In point four, there is a clear gloss of youngsters who are educated and selfassured 1 mark. Point five contains a gloss of The German football system has embraced this truth. 1 mark was given here. Question 8 The candidate was awarded 0 marks as the candidate s response did not address a specific aspect of sentence structure. SQA 12 of 36

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